Fate will happen and you can’t do anything to change it.
At any time or any place, history will only repeat itself.
You can’t change it even though the memories of the past have been forgotten.
Destiny will find a way to keep fate from happening again and again.
Somehow destiny is quite odd how could my fate be in love with a
human whilst I was a mermaid. Every adult mermaid will grow legs on
the land and our tails will then grow back in the water. It was then when I was just
little that I have fallen in love in a human boy.
It was on the sea when I first saw him. A little boy drowning.
He’s breathing is becoming shorter and shorter by second.
Interesting writing, JC!
ReplyDeleteQuite a powerful first line to hook the reader. The whole paragraph has some thoughtful ideas to make the reader think. You can use these ideas in your story.
Next you should try include some dialogue (talking/conversation).
Then, once he's saved (or not?) you could include some character description.
I like your work i like how to show the characters love and maybe next time just make it longer but the ending is good and your story is good keep up the good work
ReplyDeleteSana alll. I like the word that u put on and Keep it up :)
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